Script

Varisha and I had decided on the fact that there would be minimal dialogue in our short film, but as I began writing our script, I figured some dialogue is essential in getting out point across. Therefore, I decided to include a voiceover to engage the audience and make the plot and message clearer.

First Draft:

As I was writing our script, I noticed the lack of a tangible event or scene holding the narrative together. I then included the subplot of our character getting asked out. This helped put our script together and make sense of the events in a solid narrative that was more comprehensive. Her struggle to understand why he would ask her out is a strong trigger for her insecurities, warring with her desire to go out with the boy - which ultimately leads her to triumph over the shadow man. This might even be another relatable factor for our audience. Especially details like the 'pros and cons list', an essential part of lighthearted girlhood.

I used my own nickname for the draft, given my indecisivness on names and named the boy Aaron after, well, my massive crush on the criminal minds character Aaron Hotchner. I sent this script to Varisha then to get her feedback.

Second Draft:

I put our script on a Google Docs file and asked Varisha to add in the changes we discussed above. She typed in red and included her thoughts and dialogues for the shadow-man.

Third Draft:

I felt the script still lacked strong impact at this stage. I don't want it to be boring or really one dimensional. Thinking of solutions, I figured we could have a moment of comic relief to ease the tension, engage audiences more fully and increase intrigue while adding more depth and dimension to our film. Getting the go ahead from Varisha as she approved, I redrafted our script for a third time. The new addition is in blue font.

The third page remains the same for now.